Honest opinion

[Moe]

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page...?bandID=453870

new track called day dream.

[EvilTwin]

its ok, i dont like the sound of the chorus, i liked the chorus lyrics, just not how you did it.

[lilmamma]

our little boy is growing up!! well honestly .......i think it was great.... damn you have come a long way . your voice sounds alot better and smoother.. i have to say damn god job...and btw i want a cd... sined of course. but im cheap so i want a free one hehe(seriously) but i have to say in my honest opinon that shit was good, even the music in the back ground was..... cant wait to here more...... (evil is right there was a little somthing wierd about the courus almost sounded like you were having sex..... ) but other than that........

[Moe]

ha yeah no doubt i need to clean up the chorus...just recorded that in really little time.. basicly just to show concept etc. but thanks for the feedback!

lilmamma youll be on tour with me being the body for me and my band..

haha JK!

[BunnyMan]

(evil is right there was a little somthing wierd about the courus almost sounded like you were having sex..... ) but other than that........

haha, thank you! That's what it is! pretty much what these people said. Only other pointer I could give is that it sounds a bit like you are forcing the voice on the verses, there's def a good sound lurking in there, what I would recomend to make it go from good to great; get yourself to the point where you can recite the lyrics without reading them from the paper than just use the paper as sort of a "backup," but don't rely on it. I have the feeling if you were saying the lyrics from memory rather than reading them (cause it sounds like you are) it'll come off a bit better.
I had alot of people give me the same tip too, and once I finally listened to them I found out it worked.

[Moe]

word bro thanks...

your a mc? link of your work?

i freestyled the 2nd half of 2nd verse

[BunnyMan]

http://www.myspace.com/darkninjas
Let's just say I do stuff thats... different than your's.
Oh and everything on there is some pretty rough cuts.